hey i m posting my first story.... completed it in around n hour or so nd since its first so its not goin to be my best ...so hope u all will give me benefit of doubt in case u dont li it.....here it goes
When plan went awry…..
Whats d biggest day in a boy’s life ?
His b’dy?
Graduation day?
…………………………………………….
No…its his girlfriend’s b’day.
N its true for all those boys who are neck deep in love…..wid their so called beloved.
I know a couple,,deeply in love,,a perfect amorous couple .
Manish…..n d lady is dimple.
Manish is very excited….no its not anything to do with him…its his sweety’s b’dy next week. He has been thinking n thinking for quite some time now,but hasn’t managed to come up wid his final plan to make it a grand one….he is so helpless…
no he do have a long list of friends… but all of them are next to being useless…but none can complain…. Coz if u r studyin in an all boys college….. d whole concept of love seems to be so foreign….so these supercharged alpha males….without any experience of love ,areof no gud use…..in that sense manish is so lucky….he has one n he has the best one….
But he has to come up with his plan soon… coz he already overheard dimple speakin to her friend…about how he was supposed to make this b’dy of her a most special one….
Yes….internet..u get all d solution dere….he jumped..n googled “ how to impress a girl on her b’dy”.
N what he got…” a million dozen crazy ideas about how to make someone pregnant….”
But dis man is no dumbass….he kept on thinking…… n finally decided to go the traditional way……
Beautiful Boquet-> lovely card-> romantic movie -> dinner-.> n a surprise gift.
His imagination is on fool swing….he checked n cross checked his plans ….. so funny… I don’t think that even the dumbest can ever forget such a simple..thing…
Another real task was..how to corner out friends…. Damn he mistakenly spilled out dis b’dy episode to them….n instead of helping him out with d plan,,,, they started planning out their own party…
N manish couldn’t refuse…afterall he is d one with a lady on his side…. N it was pretty easy…. A bottle of romonov..is more than enough to make them dance[ ironically in their respective rooms… celebratin fren’s gf’s b’dy….]
So …finally d day came.. and manish all pumped up…got up as early as 5.30 am, shaved twice, bathed thrice…. N changed clothes like a new born baby does…. Obviously for some other important reasons.
And by d grace of god….d day started well..d way it was planned. Everything was going well until that scene came in d movie(which they were watching together hand in hand)……. It changed d stage.so, now onwards ,,,I m going to present both manish n dimple in real conversation mode…….
[Dimple suddenly raises from her seat… n signled manish to follow her………it took manish by complete surprise…. As if he was just pulled off from deep sleep……. He was freezed in his seat.. unable to decide…what to do….]
Manish : what? Where r u going? Movie isn’t finished as yet……!!
Dimple : plz don’t ask mea nything,,, now we r not watching this movie anymore…
Manish : not watching dis…………… y ? I mean………………what happened?
Dimple : trust me I have a damn important thing to discuss,,,,
Manish : right now ,,, r u sure?i mean it can b done later on…I have spent a lot of money for dis
Corner seat….
Dimple : oh…. Money !! is that so !! okk den I m going.you better enjoy your movie n your corner
Seat….GOOOD BYE!!
[ manish realized what a big mistake it was… how can he… he shouldn’t have mentioned money… but there was no way back….. he was fumed over himself… he shouldnt have said that without knowing d matter….. so he got up n simply followed her….]
{they kept walking for a while… without uttering a single word……. Meanwhile manish was busy figuring out what it was in that movie scene which propelled her to take such a step……}
Manish : hey, honey you were to say something….!!
Dimple : yupp !!
Manish : your silence is killing me …plz… tell me whats d matter.
Dimple : look manish I just realized that even a perfect love happens between two people who r not perfect…coz none is perfect…………………………………………………….[silence]
Manish : so?
Dimple : so .. what do you think about it…I mean about me…..?
Manish : man ,,, dis is it,,, dis is why u have screwed dis whole plan….
{he gave a look, as if he has accidently smelled shit}
Dimple : ……………………………[silently walks]
[Manish realized its her b’dy today and things should not go dis way….. so he decided to break d ice ]
Manish : what sort of qus is that baby… I mean none is perfect,, not even me,, none around is perfect….
Dimple : I know all dis,,, but I am talking about myself honey…don’t u see dat.
Manish : sweety u too r a human being…and no human being on dis earth is perfect……
Now please don’t ask me …. What exactly is not perfect with you. Because I m no good to ans this qus.
Dimple : { gave a surprised look}….. do u mean to say that….u don’t even bother to know about your
Girlfriend.
Manish : hey common .. I don’t mean dat.
Dimple : I know what u mean. U r no less than other boys….
Manish : heyy I m sorry…. But its lik so damn difficult a thing for me. Honey there may be a dozen odd things about u… but I just happen to love them all…
Dimple : well thats really sweet of u manish….but I really wanna know… there must be atleast a single thing about me which u would like to change about me…
[manish realized he was in a deep trouble…..on one side he cant hurt his gf…n other side it was she herself, who is making him do so….. how can he say anything….. infact he really liked her every single thing… never found anything… odd… even if there are some… he just luv them all]
Manish : honey…. If dis is it… den I must say… I would like to change your name……..
Dimple : name……………. my name…….u mean u don’t like my name………
My god!! I cant believe dis…..she started sobbing uncontrollably
[Manish felt himself in deep shit….. how come he could make her sob her on her b’dy…….. but he couldn’t figure out what to say..]
Manish : sorry sweety… please don’t cry…. Otherwise I will start crying… will it look nice.. a boy crying
Dimple : u know what happens to be the first thing..which I really liked in you….. it was your name……Its ur name which excites me to the seventh sky…it brings up the whole innocent face of u
Live in my mind……and I m like ecstatic……no matter how worse d situation is around.these few words hold no less importance than a god to me.
And u…….. u don’t like my name…… I mean how u can even fall in love with a girl… whose very first thing that u got to know, u dint like…….
I m feeling like someone has been fooling around me…… ………… oh god…..
[n what followed was a pool of tears….. both of them were sobbing……………………….finally manish realised dat he has to speak, he cant let this day end like this.]
Manish : hey….i m sorry..but dis is not what I meant…I never felt that your name is outdated.. I
never hesitated to mention your name to any of my friend or anyone……its just a little secret of me…. Which made me say that I want to change your name.
[dimple was heartbroken…she kept sobbing….]
Manish : please stop crying …for my sake ..please…. u know while I was growing up… I always was a
shy kid.. always hesitated to talk to any girl….. I never had a girlfriend…. But I was a boy
within… I used to envy everyone around who were in love….so much so that even one sided love stories used to be quite frustrating for me……there was no way out… slowly I started to fancy about my girl my dream girl….. who would just come n will change my world. I gave her a name, gave her an identity… gave her everything that made her real in my imagination. I even used to talk to her for hours n hours…. N I promised her that if any girl would come in my life I will give her dat name…. so that I can actually feel that see has been with me all dese years…. Then u came in my life. I m so thankful to god for that.
U changed all d meanings of my life… u r d one.. who is my dreamgirl. I always wanted to give you that name….. so that I can give u all my past life, when u was not with me.
[ dimple was so touced to hear all this that, she couldn’t utter a single word… she just came forward n hugged him tight n both of them kept crying for a while…..]
Dimple : oh my god !!
Why , u dint tell me that before.
I m so lucky to have you in my life,I cant believe u love me so much.
Manish : thank god…. U know it now…..
Don’t u want to know…what dat name is?
Dimple : oh ya… please tell me, I m dieing to hear that…. It would be d most amazing b’dy gift of my life….
Manish : all dose years when u wasn’t with me…. I used to call u ANGEL…. My angel…..
Dimple : oh dats so so sweet…..
Manish : is it so….. its because I m d cutest boy in d world……..i bet.
Dimple : yes u r d cutest one n I m d luckiest girl in d world …………….. thanks for being there in my life.
N to make my life ………………life.
good hai dost...
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pls let me be abs honest coz i want to give u true feedback...
ReplyDeletethe story(incident) connects.. amazingly its so true... use free adjustments as needed.... i will like to see u unbounded totally... while writing don't ponder for the reader's view .. write what u like.. like this one.. its cute and precise and brings me back to you...certainly credible. congratts. i cud have write in brief but i think it will help... one suggestion as per khallel jibran(if u have read him) thinking is the biggest obstacle for a writer. let everything flow out of u... the story is really cute.. once again congratts and one more thing rather being a narrotor be the actual guy in the story and see the chaNGE IT will bring..
simply mindblowing.....so touchy that i felt supremum pleasure while reading this...keep the spitit high:)
ReplyDeleteits really swt n touchy....:)
ReplyDeletenice one sir...... heart touching!!!!
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